X IDENT1 Scope Productions

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X SAMPLE SCENE3 Bedroom/Kitchen

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AUDIENCE FEEDBACK

X SAMPLE SCENE2 Bedroom/Kitchen

SAMPLE SCENE2 BEDROOM/KITCHEN
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AUDIENCE FEEDBACK
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Their points:

1. Didn't see too much difference
2. Should have made face when sniff first top
3. Second was snappier which she liked
4. Likes the sugar
5. Noticed background noise

What I think:

1. He's correct, I didn't change too much about it.  I removed one of the tops to sniff as it just took too much time.  I also tried to make the kitchen shots snappier and with more rhythm, so I downloaded and imported a metronome and tried to edit to the pace of that.
2. I agree with this point to a certain extent.  I think that it would have helped to have that added expression but I think the clothes scattered on the floor covers the slob point enough.
3. I'm glad she noticed the way that the editing was quicker and I'm glad she liked it.
4. I'm also glad she found the sugar element funny.
5. I noticed this background noise too so for my next sample scene I will find a way to remove that as much as possible.

X SAMPLE SCENE1 Bedroom/Kitchen

SAMPLE SCENE 1

For the sample scene of the bedroom and bathroom, I tried to do some match-on-action shots.  For example, in the bedroom, I tried to match the picking up and throwing down the shirts from the two separate shots.  And then as Donnie is leaving the room, the match-on-action with the fridge door opening.  For the kitchen scene, I tried to do the quick shots like in Shaun of the Dead.
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Their points:

1. Fix audio
2. Like shot in fridge
3. Teabag in tea and too much sugar
4. The sugar was funny
5. Talking in background

What I think:

1. I agree with the audio mishap in the bedroom scene as there is the wind from the impact of the top falling on the floor that made the extra sound.  I think I could possibly cut that shot a little bit shorter so that it gets rid of that sound or I could use the audio from the medium shots of his upper body.
2. I agree with the shot in the fridge and I think it really works with the match-on-action.  I could make it a little bit more smooth though.
3. I'm glad he mentioned the teabag and the sugar as our aim was to portray him as a bit of a slob so I think it worked well.
4. I'm also glad about this because we wanted to make sure that it was obvious that this was a zom-rom-com hybrid genre so I'm happy that has come across correctly.
5. Yet again, like the first point, I could fix this by using sound from other footage and also possibly adding in the effect so we still get the same effect.  Another option would be for me to film that shot again so I can get overlay the audio.